can U
see
me
crowned round
crimson shove
pseudo-phonic
arrowed-glove
naked trees in hollowed hub
bubbled barbs synthetic snub
fsssssssssssT
jab crab
triggered hall
double-helix
hooded sprawl
smearing LUV
cold-pressed
f u k
all
can U?
Graffiti is the word at dVersepoets pub where Anna Montgomery has written an elucidating prompt.
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I watched you suffer a slow aching pain/ Now you decided to show me the same -- Wild Horses (Jagger/Richards)
Jane you are getting sexier as the poems roll by. Very cool, and good as well.>KB
ha ha ha!! Yeah, I’m just getting warmed up.
Really, really, really! Really? >KB
KB, really, I don’t know. : ) this one seemed to come outta nowhere. I’m off to read your blog!
Hey Jane – another cool poem – maybe even “cooler” than most. Great sound, great hip hop beat. k.
Hi Karin, Thank you. Have a wonderful weekend. I hope the moving and sorting is easier on you than you can imagine. : )
Thanks, Jane, and thanks for all the lovely and inspiring poems. k.
jab crab
triggered hall
double-helix
hooded sprawl
haha lov ehte sound of your words in my mouth…smeared LUV fuk and all…ha…this is a rip jane….
can U? smiles
I can almost see you and I bet the parole officer definitely can. You better start running!
: ) thrilling!
I really love this one. Love the word play and the flow.. right up my alley
a departure for you?…fun and well chosen phrases to get your point across…;)
haaaa, yes. I am caught! THank you, kkkkaty.
Slam dunk gangsta boo! This is awesome and I know you’d outrun ‘em. You’ve got a bit of an outlaw soul
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loved this prompt, Anna. you may be right about the outlaw soul bit…;)
Amazing, Jane!
: )
The flow to this is absolutely fantastic!
Hi Gretchen. : ) thank you, very much.
i think artwork is much about making others see Us..isn’t it….love it jane..graffiti through and through
I agree, Claudia. Have a super weekend!
Love.LOVE.love.LoVe! Can’t say it enough! You write what I try to think! There’s a satisfaction in this!
“crowned round
crimson shove
pseudo-phonic
arrowed-glove”
This is very impressive. I’m a big fan of your style!
thank you. Much! so very glad you read and enjoyed.
I have not been able to find your blog, on my way over to dVerse. maybe you left a link. cheers!!
Oh so good – and the flow is fantastic.
Anna
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Hi Anna! thank you : )
The title is just killer, Jane, and the poem keeps that sort of ironic double vision. The tight rhyme and structure rather mimics the intricacies of a lot of graffiti–where words are as much murals, colors, pictures, as they are words. Nicely executed, vivid and original.
thank you, Hedge.
Love the word jammin’ here!
thx : )
Has good rhythm!
You bet I can! Straight up ‘hood.
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/02/22/it-is-written-vehicles-of-the-word/
A new side to Jane. What fun!
it is fun, Lori. And I thought I was just beginning to find my voice…ah well. ; )
Hi Jane
Yes! the irony is perfect and allows the subject room to breathe
and entertain, live even, occupying its own space in rapid quickfire . . .
UgottaBKwiK B4 da Copz catchYA @ IT!!!
zziipp
Great rhythm, great beat, great wordz – just gr8
hi Tony. Thanks!
A different voice, a cool and snappy post, Jane
thx Grace : )
No mean feat to fuse (and fully achieve the aesthetic) of both ends of the spectrum – street/toilet graffiti and poetry. Can’t fault you here… love the way you bring it full-circle to close
thx, Luke.